Misc excerpts
Lucky 7
A Game of Excerpts
As some of you may know, Of Moths & Butterflies was recently reviewed by the lovely Mirella Patzer. I was not only extremely pleased by her kind praise of my debut novel, but I was really honoured to be noticed by Mirella, for whom I have the greatest respect and admiration. As if her magnificent review wasn’t enough, she also tagged me to take part in this little Lucky 7 game that’s going around, where authors are chosen to share seven lines from their current work in progress. The timing could be better, for I return this week to working on Cry of the Peacock. It’s about time, too, as the publication date, October 2012, looms before me.
The contest rules are:
He spoke of piazzas and Palazzi and basilicas until it was all a blur of incomprehensible language. Antiquities, gallerias and musei littered the air and now and then he would drop into Latin or Italian—she was not always quite sure which was which—as his mother nodded and smiled and offered the perfectly placed “I see” whenever it was convenient.
“It sounds as though you had quite a time,” she said when it seemed he had at last finished.
“Yes,” he answered. “If I had not to drag James around to see the sights- At least his idea of sightseeing was somewhat different than mine,” and he darted a telling glance in Abbie’s direction…
Now to tag seven authors whose works I have both read and love. I hope they’ll be able to participate, but considering how busy some of these wonderful people are, I’ll excuse them if they cannot. Do check out their blogs anyway. They’re definitely worth a look.
Judy, by Val-Rae Sanford, age 11
I’m accustomed to telling people that I’ve been writing seriously since I started my first book, Cry of the Peacock, about seven years ago. My sister lately reminded me that that is not entirely the case. I don’t really remember writing this, but evidently, in the fifth grade, I was given a writing assignment. My sister saved it, and sent me copies (she won’t give up the originals in case one day I’m super famous, ha ha).
And so I’ll share them with you. Don’t laugh.
***It is strange to me how much has stayed the same: my penchant for complicated plots, my slight leanings toward English names and spellings. And my habit of starting sentences (like this one) with articles.
Judy
Chapter one – A Baby is Born
It was a busy day. My mom was in the hospital. We were getting ready to visit her.
My mom had had a baby with blue eyes, and blonde hair, and her name was Judy. She was born six weeks ago at St. Peter’s Hospital.
Finally, on Friday, mom and Judy came home. But Judy had to stay in bed all of the time and I hardly ever got to see her.
One day mom gave Judy a vitamin. I was sitting in a chair in her room when Judy spit it out.
Chapter two-Judy Gets Kidnapped
It was Tuesday morning. I heard mom going into Judy’s room. Then I heard a scream. I got out of bed, put my slippers on, and put on my robe. I ran out of my room and into Judy’s. Mom was crying.
“What’s the matter, mom?” I asked.
“Judy’s gone!” And mom cried harder.
I sat down beside her. “It’s all right. We’ll find her,” I said.
“No it’s not!” she yelled. “It’s not all right!” And ran into the bathroom.
Chapter three – Judy Causes Trouble
Meanwhile, Judy was in the city with the Dark Deamond. The meanest man in the state of California.
He had put Judy in his car with the window open.
The car was not moving, so Judy crawled out the window and went into a store.
She knocked down soup cans and squirted toothpaste all over and spilled tomato sauce everywhere.
Chapter four – Judy at the Police Station
The police came right away and called my parents. They were glad she was all right. But a police officer said she had caused a lot of trouble.
Chapter five – Judy Goes Home
On the way home, Judy said, “I want a vitamin.”
Mom was astonished, she didn’t like vitamins, and nobody had ever heard her talk before.
Chapter six – Another Baby is Born
“Jennifer,” dad called.
“What?” I answered back.
“Come here,” dad said. “Your mom just had a new baby boy!”
“Wow,” I yelled.
“All right, Jennifer, you don’t have to let the whole world know about it.”
“Sorry,” I said.
Chapter seven – The Fire
It was Wednesday and my friend Molly was coming over to play. I had to watch my brother Billy and my sister Judy.
Molly was finally here and we could start our baseball game. We went out side and Judy came along with us but I left Billy in the bedroom.
Our team was winning 12 to nothing and I was up to bat. Then, just as I was about to hit the ball Judy started pulling on my shirt.
“What” I yelled.
“What’s that in the house,” she asked.
I turned around. The house was on fire and the flames were coming out of the same room Billy was in.
My friends, Judy and I ran to the house.
I grabbed the fire extinguisher but one was gone.
Judy found it and ran upstairs.
Mom had showed us how to use them if something like this ever happened.
Judy went upstairs, wrapped Billy up in cloth and threw him down the laundry shoot, while we put out the fire.
Chapter eight – The Award
Later the fire station and police found out what Judy had done. They gave her an award.
She saved the house and Billy.
Chapter nine – Jenny Gets Married
That night I went on a date with Jack Greywood.
We had a great time. We saw a movie, at popcorn, then we went out for dinner and then we went dancing.
Before he took me home, he asked me to marry him. I said “Yes”. We got married that Saturday.
Saturday finally came. I was dressed in a white wedding gown with a white veil.
After the wedding we went on our honeymoon.
We took a cruise on the ”Love Boat,” found a house, had a party in it, and went to Hawaii.
We were very happy with our new house. It was a four story house with three bedrooms, two bathrooms, a t.v. room, a living room, a kitchen, a basement, an attic, and plenty more.
Chapter ten – Sandie
One day I had a baby. Her name was Sandy and do you know what? The whole thing started all over again!
The End.
On blindness
It is an undeniable irony of life that, despite his many blessings, man is an ungrateful brute, finding handicaps and obstacles in that which ought to bless him most. The wealthy man, comfortable in his great house, with his soft furnishings and glowing hearth, is rarely sympathetic to the plight of the poor. If a man wants for food and raiment, ought he not to work for it? There are jobs enough for those who truly want them, declares our man of wealth and wisdom—from the chair he has not left all day.
Even modern conveniences become a source of irritation when they fail us in their obligations. We have employed them, paid good money for them, ought they not to work as they were designed to do?
The weather, as mundane a thing as can be imagined, yet manages to vex our lives as few other things can. The sun that makes it possible to grow our vegetable gardens and to take our vacations to seaside towns, is often too glaring or too warm. Conversely, the rain that waters the crops, that fills the rivers and streams, ruins our plans and dampens our moods.
Our five senses, likewise, are blessings of which we are rarely mindful, save when we cannot use them to their best advantage. We curse our noses for the colds they catch, our hands for the injuries they suffer, our ears for the sounds that annoy us. The seeing man is often blinded to the subtleties of his environment by the obvious. He takes what he sees as truth and rejects what might lay beneath the surface. A beautiful house is more desirable than a humble one, however inconvenient it may be. A beautiful woman, likewise, far more suitable than she who, though clever and resourceful, has less to be proud of in her appearance.
Those five senses (though some may argue six), while so essential to our lives, are things we too often take for granted. Is it possible that one, being deprived of a part of his natural senses, might appreciate them all the more? Might he have a sweeter understanding of life and its hidden meanings?
Perhaps.
Perhaps not.
* * *
In a large suite of rooms in a sprawling country house, sits such a man as we might put these questions to. At the moment we join him we see that he is annoyed to distraction by the apparent lack of urgency conveyed by the firm pulling of the chord to the bells that are attached at its furthest end. In short, his servants are too slow. But this is only a part (though admittedly the greater part) of his anxieties. Other considerations circumstantially have added to them, for the weather, too hot yesterday, is dreary and damp today. A strange dog has found its way onto the property and will not leave off barking. His ears are ringing and his head has begun to ache. His tea, now cold, has too much lemon. And on top of all this, he suspects he is coming down with a cold.
As to his sight, he cannot complain. That is, he has no new complaint to speak of. Arthur Tremonton was born, to his mother’s sorrow and his father’s indignation, blind.
By his staff, Arthur might have been described—were you to ask them, and assuming they were inclined to oblige—as a man of better than average looks. His hair was fair and grew thick upon his head. His eyes bore no evidence of his malady save in their unusual paleness, a liquid blue that appeared almost white. He was tall, lithe and elegant, well dressed, well groomed and immaculate in speech if not entirely in manner. And, perhaps most significantly of all, he was well educated, which was an extraordinary thing considering he had never had a single day of school. No, he had lived his life in this house, confined, almost exclusively (at first by the dictates of his parents, now dead, and then by habit) to an upper suite of rooms. He had been provided with tutors, naturally, but it was not until he had inherited his father’s library, and the vast collection of books within it, that his education ventured into anything nearing higher learning. The deficiencies consequent of an education directed by a too protective mother and an unsympathetic father were more than made up for in the years that followed their passing.
Of course it was not the library alone Arthur had inherited, but the house, as well as its sprawling park, its ample staff, and even, to his great fortune, his father’s aged valet, who had also served, these many years, as his teacher. Arthur could not read, but he could hear, and he could remember, and he could understand like few others. He possessed an almost supernatural gift of recollection, a keen comprehension of concepts, histories, theories and philosophies he could only experience in his mind. It was certainly a fortunate thing that Arthur had been born to money and position, for, at the age of seven and twenty, he could apply himself to no more practical occupation than that of a perpetual scholar. He had no skills to speak of that were not of the cerebral persuasion. Had he been born a poor man; a mill worker, or a printer, a farmer, perhaps, he would have been at the mercy of an unforgiving world. What hardships he would have had to endure! He could not imagine it. But then he never tried. A man’s hardships were his business. Arthur Tremonton had his own trials, and they were quite enough.
Where was Mrs. Pritchet with his tea! He rang the bell once more.
Some, he knew, made themselves burdensome, and with far less reason than Arthur possessed. And yet hadn’t he made something of his life?
Again, he applied his hand to the bell cord. Harder this time. Surely it was working well enough.
He would not make a nuisance of himself for the world! Such were better off dead. He would bother no one by his infirmity. And he would prefer that the consideration be reciprocated. He needed no one, which was perhaps a good thing as he had no friends. He did not like visitors and detested interruptions of any sort. Most, by now, had learned it was best to leave him in peace. Most, but not all. For those infernal charity Sisters would persist! And why must they keep coming? Their efforts were wasted to extract money, or to plumb the depths of his soul. They could not help him and he certainly did not want their pity.
Was he lonely? Well, yes. Of course he was. But he valued his privacy and solitude more than he did company. And those had ever come could never keep up a satisfactory conversation, for they could not compete with his intellect and only spoke of the things they saw and the places they went, as if they meant to brag of the talents they possessed and of which he had been born deficient. It was, in truth, nothing more than an insult to his impairment. He was blind! Was he ever going to cease to be blind? No! Would he ever be able to embark upon such adventures on his own? Of course not! So what use was there in discussing them? Try as a man might, Arthur could not be made to understand what a banana tree looked like, or an elephant or the ocean. The phrases ‘large as a house’, ‘fast as a horse’, ‘grey as the sea’… these meant nothing to him. One cannot comprehend the size and shape of a buffalo if one has not seen it for oneself. One cannot describe the shades of the dusk-lit sky if one has never seen colour or shade or even vast and open space. It is impossible. And it is insulting! And he did not cower in telling them so.
Wisely, and mercifully, these visitors had ceased over time to come at all. All but the wretched, annoying, supercilious young women of the Sisters’ Charitable Aid Society! They would come this very afternoon, despite a grumbling sky and the rain that tapped at the windows. They would come. They always came when he wished most to be left alone. Just see if they didn’t!
***Blind is a soon to be published novelette. More info will be forthcoming. Stay tuned.***

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